Not a fan of second-person POV story, but it just works here. The occasional fourth wall break also serves as good comedy. The... "three visits" format and the writing are well done but I have to admit the lack of audio and inconsistent-sized, blurry BGs take a lot of the enjoyment.
I understand that time constraint might be the biggest problem. I wish to experience the game again when (if) it's in a better-polished state. Still a good read though!