Unexpected mpreg! I have reread this VN and I do believe that this might be the weakest of the bunch you submitted. While I do enjoy all of the custom assets that were made for this VN, it feels like the writing took a toll so that the rest of the game can be developed quickly. It was a fun read though
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Yes, this was my least favorite. I intentionally wrote something as far out of my comfort zone as possible, but unfortunately had to stop in the middle of the story to take care of some emergency home repairs and lost two weeks of potential time to work on the story, not to mention my train of thought.
I like to do all the writing at the same time to maintain cohesiveness, but writing in general is my weakest asset to begin with; I haven't written anything in a very long time prior to the game jam, and entered primarily so I could get feedback on what areas to work on. I more enjoy working on the art and music parts, and would like to work as part of a team next time. I wanted to get some basic programming experience and creating sprites and music tracks under my belt, and as a result, the story was less a priority than it should have been in all of my entries.
I went from planning three "chapters" down to two, and focused on trying to tie up all the loose ends from part one, hence the extra heavy exposition that I hated even as I wrote it. I tried to go for over the top and cringe, but due to my mediocre writing, it ended up falling flat by the end. I would have been better off leaving things unfinished and taking my time with this one.
I didn't really know what I wanted the story to be, and it shows.