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Unexpected mpreg! I have reread this VN and I do believe that this might be the weakest of the bunch you submitted. While I do enjoy all of the custom assets that were made for this VN, it feels like the writing took a toll so that the rest of the game can be developed quickly.  It was a fun read though

Wasn't aware this was a shitpost given short story form. Was given probably my favorite probably unintentional bug in any VN I've read (see below). I do sorta wanna see what other projects you can do, cuz for a shitpost this genuinely made me laugh and cringe.

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I quite enjoyed the amount of slang and the vibes the characters gave off. Not the most narratively compelling of the VNs I've read, but definitely the most impressive due to the fact that there was a LOT more to the premade sprites than I thought, so that was cool how you implemented them. I just sorta wished that the Misery character wasn't the narrator and instead an active character within the movie. It would make things flow much better.

I love the idea of the afterlife being a sort of purgatory of a person's life changing moment, which in this case was a video store. I could sort of see where the story would go after I realized that the wolf was having his life literally flash before his eyes. Still! I didn't really feel sold on the "giving up memories" portion because there wasn't any discernable downsides to such a choice. Still a very nice read and I do feel like if this one had a tiny bit more time I would enjoy it more cuz I can see the vision. It just didn't cook long enough.

Short , but slightly confusing! It feels like there wasn't enough time to properly end the story, and I do wonder what would happen after! Great job with this one, just wish there was a bit more story here. It's ok so far.

It's good! The writing is by far my most favorite within the VN, with the art a very close second. I don't really remember much about the UI or music, but they were there as well. The branching paths was a surprise but getting all the endings was a bit of a pain. It took a couple of read throughs before I caught the "expansion" theme that I can only tell happens in the "good" ending with the enlarged heart.

By far the most character I've seen in all the submissions I've read so far. The art is full of life and energy, and my gods I'm so happy DECO*27 is in here.  I don't have much to add other than the only nitpick I have is the "epilogue" after Haruto steels their resolve to be Akuma's boyfriend and the screen fades to black. That would have been a good stopping point instead of the scene in the shed. That felt like it could have been an unlockable side story after reading the whole story. Still! I enjoyed this VN a lot.

The art style is very cute, I love it. I also like the idea of separating the story into 3 acts with a poem, but it feels like it could have been done better. Asides from that, it would have also been nice to have a clearer picture painted of the social landscape of the story at the beginning. The theme for "expansion" is also done subtly within the text itself, with lirself learning to be more compassionate and empathetic. ALSO! One of the first VN's that I've read that have neopronouns! 

It's implied that the "expansion" is the black hole but it took a few reads for me to get that part.

Theme aside, this is I think of my favorites within the jam simply because of how evocative the writing is and the stellar music. It helps that the UI looks sleek. I'm just blown away by the premise. This is great.

EDIT: sorry for the multiple comments!

Oh, wasn't expecting Attack on Titan-esque story here. I don't really mind,  but I do wish there was a bit more of a build up towards the giant showing up. I think it's cuz I watched a bit of the anime, but the fight scene was done well but I'm unsure how people who haven't seen the anime would react to the pacing. I do look forward to the completion of this project, mainly cuz I haven't seen any actual macro VNs.

This is a lovely and quick read. I don't really see how it fits within the "expansion" theme, but what is there is cute! Love that True is an old grey muzzle and that Lupus is a short king. I don't really see much of these in VNs I've read, so it was refreshing!