I really enjoy the story and like the writing for the most part, however in the current update I feel you rely too much on direct exposition like "Esther is sceptical. She was there..." - to me it would feel more immersive and realistic if you didnt switch to an all-knowing narrator (or at least not as much as in the current update). most of it can be easily tweaked into MCs internal monologue/observations. "Esther seems very sceptical. She was there..." for the previous example. Stuff like "Sue is jealous because MC left his phone with Aurora" just feels likea cheap way out of a conversation between those two or Sue and MC later, at least to me.
Either way, you do you and I am sure I'll enjoy the next updates as well, no matter which decision you make in this regard.