(Your game is at 21:38. I do also have commentary version, might be cursed tho, and unfortunately, this one still recorded while still healing from sick.)
Overall, I enjoyed this one! Like someone else on the comments, your writing of fantasy is great, and I love the character's back and forth interactions, which made me gay.
Still I love this one so much! The music as well is very good.
Overall, I should definitely check some of your other VNs.