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Hello. This was a interesting game for sure.


Spoilers.

Going to be real here I didnt think anything of this game the first time I looked at it and lets just say that I was a lillte correct there. I get that the style is because of the crayons from the story but even then it doesnt make it look good. Anywho I always say that a good story can make up for a bad art style. The story was one of the better things here. though even that could use some work. Dont get me wrong the story was decent but the way you tried telling it was a bit jaring. Having drawings underwater was just a bit odd. The character dialogue was a bit strange. Every time a character meets a new character it alkways started with hi and hi. Thats fine in real life but for a story that can be a bit wierd. Do have to say that i can see that you have put in some everts. But even so the decent story cant really save it.


Final thoughts is that this could be so much more. Just work on your dialogue and drawing skills and then I think you can make a good game because I can see that you do know how to make a story. So keep it up and hope to see you around.

thank you for the feedback!! :>

i fully admit the style probably isn't for everyone haha.  since i have very little artistic skills when it comes to like, detailed drawings or even pixel art, i decided to go for a look that was purposefully "rough" to fit the story (while still trying to make it look readable). i'm sorry to hear it didn't work for you. i'll definitely try to do different visual styles in my following projects, to find out what sticks!

i'm glad you liked the story! and i completely understand the dialogue feeling weird, it's REALLY hard for me to write dialogue and i don't always get the best results haha. i have to revise almost every sentence and think "does this sound good? did i use this word before??". and sometimes everything just ends up sounding really unnatural lol. but i'll keep on trying! i really want to get dialogue right in my games.  (i do want to say that the characters starting conversations with "hi" was on purpose. not trying to invalidate your criticism, just that it was a deliberate choice. i understand if it didn't sound good though)

thank you for playing!! <3