First thing: this is way too loud, and I don't know what it is but there is an issue with the kicks its really unpleasant.
Composition wise it is too repetitive, and the asynchrony of the motif could work but it doesnt sound right as it is, maybe the gap between the two melodic lines is either too big or too small. Still the instrument choice is pretty good and make sense for the game even if in the end it gave me more of a "campfire song" feel.