Hello, I hope you are well!
I recently completed the game and have some notes that you may want to address in a new update. Sorry I can't be more specific in the list, I didn't think to include what scenes they were part of until now, as I write this! (Duh, what an oversight on my part)
I think I was playing v1.01, instead of the initial release, if that helps any.
In a one-on-one conversation with Kyros, its ends like this:
"He gives a final nod before leaving your room.
Once alone you remove your dress and hang it carefully, then don your church clothing once more.
He bears a small smile and a blush when wishing you a good evening."
When everyone comes together to plan the festival:
"Conversation is lively as you eat; your companions discuss their plants for the festival." Erm, plants? You meant plans, I'm guessing?
I found a possible contradiction against your notebook with Bryn:
In the notebook, Bryn goes with the priests to find Ceri and he's already chosen as her paladin. Yet here;
"Then Kyros and come priets left on some strange, secret mission, and they returned with you.
A smile stretches his lips.
Then I was chose to be your paladin. You saved me."
You need a space here:
I-I don't want to disappoint you. I just- the church has feelingsregarding pre-marital sex, and I-"
In one of Kyros' endings, he suddenly wears clothing and then loses them again on the next;
"But that didn't happen. So let's not dwell on it."
Another typo for one of Kyros' endings:
I"'m just getting started."
Another typo from Kyros, but I don't remember the scene (I THINK it's after their argument and they go talk to Ceri?)
"I see".
Despite the above list, the game was beautifully done! It was wonderful to see a more feminine touch on sexuality, thank you very much for making it! I was also a fan of the Hero's Journey so clearly you have a knack for storytelling! I wish you all the best for any and all games you make after this!