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Hello, I hope you are well!

I recently completed the game and have some notes that you may want to address in a new update. Sorry I can't be more specific in the list, I didn't think to include what scenes they were part of until now, as I write this!  (Duh, what an oversight on my part)

I think I was playing v1.01, instead of the initial release, if that helps any.

In a one-on-one conversation with Kyros, its ends like this:

"He gives a final nod before leaving your room.

Once alone you remove your dress and hang it carefully, then don your church clothing once more.

He bears a small smile and a blush when wishing you a good evening."

When everyone comes together to plan the festival:

"Conversation is lively as you eat; your companions discuss their plants for the festival." Erm, plants? You meant plans, I'm guessing?

I found a possible contradiction against your notebook with Bryn:

In the notebook, Bryn goes with the priests to find Ceri and he's already chosen as her paladin. Yet here;

"Then Kyros and come priets left on some strange, secret mission, and they returned with you.

A smile stretches his lips.

Then I was chose to be your paladin. You saved me."

You need a space here:

I-I don't want to disappoint you. I just- the church has feelingsregarding pre-marital sex, and I-"

In one of Kyros' endings, he suddenly wears clothing and then loses them again on the next;

"But that didn't happen. So let's not dwell on it."

Another typo for one of Kyros' endings:

I"'m just getting started."

Another typo from Kyros, but I don't remember the scene (I THINK it's after their argument and they go talk to Ceri?)

"I see".

Despite the above list, the game was beautifully done! It was wonderful to see a more feminine touch on sexuality, thank you very much for making it! I was also a fan of the Hero's Journey so clearly you have a knack for storytelling! I wish you all the best for any and all games you make after this!

Congratulations on the release, and for all the hard work that went into it from you all! It's an ADW game, so I pretty much have to play it; what a wonderful problem to have! ;p

Hello all! I was also wondering if this game got abandoned and looked up their tumblr linked on the page. The latest update (that I saw) about the game was May 7th 2023, and it mentioned that they have been working on completing chapter 1 but have had delays. Chapter 2 hasn't been drafted yet.

https://beauideals.tumblr.com/post/716714068801650688/the-delay, if you want to read it yourself. Fingers crossed this means that the game isn't abandoned!

Omg (trying to hold back laugher after that comic), I never even considered what Jeth's life would be like if he succeeded his goal. Poor guy, he's going to have a hard time in general due to his violent tendencies. Also, he was the one that was getting misgendered? I expected it to be Lor for some reason.

You did it! Congratulations for all your hard work! *high five*

Been waiting for this game since the first demo, bought it on release and devoured it on my days off work, finished it already.

It has given me trust issues and a dislike of cats (white cats, specifically).

Signs of a brilliant game!

Btw, the letters from Quinn still end in cQuinn, except the letter in the what if scenario. There are a few grammar mistakes but nothing detrimental to my enjoyment of the game. Example - on one of the side stories (I think it was a mini story? I should have kept a record, sorry!) one of the lines refers to the MCs therapist as 'the kid shrinks', I believe it's supposed to be the kid's shrink lol Just a little typo that gave me the giggles

I do prefer to read as many dialogue choices as I can because they let me know 1. a little more about the character or 2. that the author isn't too interested in in variation in dialogue. It's always a treat for me when I see a different response but that is because I enjoy reading. So naturally I want to give my appreciation that you go to such lengths for your projects.

I will email you the list because of the length and I don't want to clog up the comments page here.

Hello!

Great game and I very much appreciate that it's much faster paced over ADW in regards to reaching bond levels. Very useful for me when I had to reset because I didn't realise I had a select amount of time to raise loyalty for characters and ended up missing unrequired bond events.

Favourite character so far is Jeth the bad ender/the walking red flag because if I'm playing on the villain's team then I'm going for the most villainous of the three LIs! Not salty at all that he killed me twice because I wanted to be rebellious, or that he slashed me up/wanted to attack when I declined his advances because I wanted to check out Mikaylis and Deita. And hot damn does he know how to run hot and cold with the MC, when he's happy he's ecstatic and overly affectionate and when he isn't, well... What an utterly toxic piece of work - I love it. Absolutely looking forward to seeing what end I get with Jeth; I assume it will be morally terrible and I'm so into that. If it isn't as bad as I expect, well, I look forward to the surprise!

Btw, I noticed the slight design change on Deita! It's much more obvious that she's water compared to the original ADW with the multicoloured beads in her hair and on her collar. Still forming an opinion on her, she seems likable enough. For me at least, her personality isn't as strong as the other characters in the game, including the non LIs. I understand why, however. She's a good person stuck in an impossible situation, trying to survive now she's served her purpose, treading a fine line to be a good influence and not overreaching. It makes sense to me that she has to subdue herself and play the long game. Again, I look forward to seeing her endings now she's taking a more 'active' and stronger role at the end of the war prep.

Mikaylis seems sweet (compared to Jeth... which honestly is a terrible frame of reference for anyone). He's a bit needy but that's understandable. Maybe it's because I'm comparing him to the others in AVH but he doesn't seem that bad, like he's only there because he wants to support his sister and uphold the law. I was glad to see that he gets jealous when MC favours Jeth/goes to the forest because until then it seemed that he was too passive. I mean, he does admit that's how he wants to stand out but come on man, don't be a doormat!

I do miss that this doesn't have friend events but I do see why these are missing from both a technical and plot point of view. These characters are obsessive; capable of being suffocatingly possessive and cloyingly sweet depending on the favour shown by the MC that friendship simply doesn't/cannot satisfy their wants and desires. Also for you that's a hell of a lot more work and I don't blame you for giving that a hard nope.

Also, I have spelling corrections to give but you don't have an errors page here like ADW does so I wasn't sure what to do. I thought it would be best to ask, should I post them here or do you have a different different preference to receive them?

I haven't found everything (not that your work is riddled with mistakes!), and I only record them as and when I find them - and stopped when I reached the war prep for reasons I have since forgotten. Basically, I haven't been actively looking but would be happy to do so if you'd like/find helpful?

Wish you all the best!

Phew, I'm so glad that didn't annoy you! I didn't intend to record all of these originally but with baby brothers at college asking me to double check their work and younger colleagues doing the same I kinda, sorta got in the headspace and your work was the first thing I came across while in that mood. At least it was helpful to you so I'll do my best with A Villain's Heart.

I'm sorry to hear how tired you're feeling lately, unfortunately all I can do is to send my best wishes and hope you get some rest. I understand how easy it is to miss words, god knows I space out and do it too so it's only right that I do my best to support another person with similar problems.

I don't really have much to add regarding errors now I've listed them all. Only one thing bothers me but it's not an error, more likely something you didn't have time to do. All the little common units have their own story (which I love, it makes them less generic to me) but I can't support Earth Rogue after the second bond talk! He asks whether I should continue to lean on him or words to that effect. I just want to help get him out of his depressed funk :'(.  I can't complain, I get the +1 bond each time and that's what's most important. Talking about the common units, I have to wonder just what Earth Knight drunkenly did/say that he felt he had to beg forgiveness!

Regarding the characters, I like them all to more or less degrees. I've stated that Ruwin and Beisel are my favourite but their reasons for being so are completely different. Ruwin simply amuses me because of the sheer devotion he has for the MC, even to the point that he doesn't care about angering/annoying the others. ...Buuuut I also see that he wouldn't care about that anyway so it makes him feel more genuine and not as someone trying to get the 'closest'. He's very simple and honest and I tend to like those kind of characters in general (even if he did threaten to beat me into a bloody pulp, at least he admitted that he'd regret it). He even admits that he wants to be more like the MC; doing good things for others seems to be his end goal because he doesn't want to regress into the sort of person he was feels very human. I think most people can relate to this to more or less degrees, the desire for self improvement (hopefully not to escape the torment of a past murder though...). The one thing I noticed is that he expands on different past sins depending on whether you're on the love or friendship scene, I felt that was a good attention to detail. It seemed that with the friendship route, he's trying to be completely open but on the love route he wants to be as open as possible without destroying any chance he has with the MC.

Beisel is adorable! I've tried the love and friendship scene for all the characters and she was a darling in both of hers. The overall theme she gives me during them is that she just wants a someone close to her so she can pamper them. The admission that she wanted a best friend to walk arm in arm with was what ensnared me. I aww'ed too much over that. I usually have problems with warrior women because of how they're portrayed, the whole thing where they are strong and may as well be a man with boobs because femininity seems to be anathema to them. But Beisel was just perfect, she may not be feminine but she is 'girly' and isn't ashamed of that, she has times where she's tired but understands that she just has to get back up and kick butt. An awesome little lady. I do wonder how different she acts with a male MC and I will try it out in the future (preferably when the grinding has been sorted).

While I have trouble deciding which character is number one or two in my eyes, Katnir is a very respected three. He seems to genuinely care for the MC early on. While the others are all arguing what the Transient One will do to do whatever it is they want the MC to do, Katnir is reminding them all that the MC has no obligation and may well just want to go home AND THAT'S OKAY. The difference between the friendship and love route was much more obvious but it made sense to me. His mini freak out after the love confession stems from him overthinking, which he seemingly does frequently, so he seemed to stay within character to me.

The others are sweet too in their own way. Lor needs some tissues - he's just as honest as Ruwin in the emotional sense just in the opposite way. Emotional honesty is not the same a factual honesty and it's very easy to see early on (as Water Mage) that he has some secrets if only because he repeatedly downplays himself so he doesn't give the MC any information that may lead to him slipping up and admitting things he did not want to confront. Again, like Ruwin, he's tormented by his past but unlike Ruwin he believes in redemption and will aspire towards that. Same desire but different reasons (the desire to do good but become a better person (Lor) and the desire to do good to not be a bad person again (Ruwin))

Samuel and Beleiph seem to have a similar character development in that they need to learn how to interact with others. Samuel is trying to figure out who he is when he isn't the temple fortune teller but he is kind and earnestly tries to reach out (he's the only character that figures out that maybe the MC isn't feeling all that great about being there and may want a hug/friendly pat-pat!). Beleiph seems to know who he is already but doesn't know how to progress and bridge the gap between people and beasts. With that being his life work, he is aware that he has little to say other than that and it seems to cause some level of personal discomfort because he wants to get close to the MC and just doesn't know how. Samuel seems like he has the ability to learn and grow on his own but Beleiph will need a bit more help and doesn't know how to ask for it.

I may have read these characters wrong but that's my interpretation on them all. They have very human issues, that people can sympathise with even if they don't understand. It has only just occurred to me that the similarities between characters (redemption - Lor/Ruwin and humanity - Samuel/Beleiph) seem to happen with conflicting elements. I don't know if that was intentional but nicely done! And of course, Beisel doesn't have this issue because she's lovely and wonderful as is.

Regarding the loyalty grinding, I have a few thoughts. I noticed that money isn't used very much after recruiting all the common units (at least I didn't use it other than to pay for Samuel's readings) and had an idea. What if there are other gifts to buy that give small loyalty boosts like +2 or +5 or whatever depending on price?

On another note, it turns out I've played your previous work! I had finished Soul Union then dabbled with Soul Labyrinth in my (at the time, sparse) spare time and enjoyed them, swore that I would keep an eye on future works, got caught up in my work and unfortunately forgot about you! Even after playing ADW something had played on my mind - "why does this art style feel similar?" So when I looked up what else you'd made, I felt like an idiot when it all came together!

So what I've learnt from that is that I'm a fan and am looking forward to whatever comes next from ADW or another project!

I shall stop here and wish you all the best in both your projects and personal stuff! Thank you for reading my comment and not getting angry over the amount of spelling mistakes I raised lol

Air priest opts out of all 3 mid rows, example

1. Using air priest in any of the mid rows takes away that slot (I didn't need them but I accidently found this when my mouse jumps as I was making my choice and went ahead to check out what happens)

Tried posting images but they didn't work, so I'll try posting them individually.

2.  Second bond talk with Water Rogue with comes up with the KeyError: 'hero,name'

3. Third bond talk with Water Priest comes up with the TypeError: %c requires int or char

Hello!

First off, I would like to say how much I enjoy the game and the characters within (Ruwin and Beisel are my top favs). I could rave about this for a while but I won't because I don't want to waste your time.

I found plenty of spelling mistakes and recorded them for you - unfortunately, I only started noticing/recording them after reaching Brookhaven but here they are! The brackets are my notes, not that I thought you wouldn't figure it out, I just like getting caught up in details. 

I am positively looking forward to the alternative world of Villain's Heart and would happily compile a report like this but I suspect after this, you'll get sick my comments lol

I also found a couple of bugs (not very important, but I couldn't help myself and added them , I'll put those down as a separate post from this.

I used version 1.44 for windows

 Ruwin 3^rd talk, Trade District

Choose 'There is no need'.

True. My Ladyhas a good eye for people [Needs a space]

Lor 2^nd bond talk

Choose 'Everything is fine.'

To order to show our respect to you, [In order to show our respect to you]

It's unworthy of a title. My <name> must be disillusioned with me.  [Must be Lord/Lady]

Lor 3^rd bond talk

Choose 'No one can be calm all the time.'

The interesting thing is the more I accept my weakness, the more comfotable I become. [comfortable]

Lor 4^th bond talk

The members gave unanimously reported high levels of satisfaction with my Lady leadership. [my Lady/Lord's]

Choose 'Wheel of fate?'

Whether you, my Lady lose or gain favour, [missing punctuation - Whether you, my Lady, lose or gain favor]

I can say from my own experience that you have inspired me to aspire to a better mage- [aspire to be a become a better mage]

Katnir 2^nd bond talk

What have I done to earn such a praise? [a is not needed]

Earth Knight, 3^rd bond talk

Choose 'This is a problem.'

When we share food, money and space we must tae extra care to be respectful towards others at all times. [take]

Air Knight 2^nd bond talk

Choice – You need to replaced. [forgot be]

Fire Mage 1^st bond talk

Choose 'For example?'

Long ago, the gods were disatisfied with those with unretrained greed that caused suffering to so many of their creations. [dissatisfied and unrestrained]

Fire Mage 4^th bond talk

Choose 'Haven't read it.'

I see... my Lady very busy of course. [my Lady is very busy]]

Air Mage 4^th bond talk

Choose 'Your team matters'

I need should've understood there is a much bigger picture that I am only a part of. [need seems unnecessary]

Earth Mage 2^nd bond talk

Choose 'Are you moody?'

My Lady knows that we all have a hide range of emotions, correct? [wide instead of hide]

Earth Mage 3^th bond talk

Choose 'I love predictable'

There's nothing more satisfying that a wll executed plan going accordingly, my Lady. [well]

Choose 'It's a balance'

We who are born here, can't hekp but feel affinity towards our own. [help]

Samuel, after battle sewer talk

I assumed the siuation was beneficial to them as well. [situation]

Samuel, sewers talk, talking to Katnir during the 3 silence breaking conversations

To say suggest such an uncouth thing to my Lady-! [say is unnecessary]

Ruwin, exploring sewers

I detest the this wetness, my Lady. It's weighing me down. [this is unnecessary]

Lor, after returning to temple after sewers

We'll need sometime to come up with another plan to keep my Lady safe. [some time, instead of sometime]

Lor, meeting Beileph at bestiary

We must make plans protect my Lady at all costs. [make plans to protect]

Ruwin, after wave 4

At last... It's about time that snivelling coward to make his grand entrance. [It's about time that snivelling coward makes his grand entrance or It's about time for that snivelling coward to make his grand entrance]

Water Knight, 4^th bond talk

Choose 'glad your doing well.'

Thank you, my Ladyfor your caring words. [space]

Water Priest, 1^st bond talk

My intuition has become dull recently and I'm afraid I might be able to perform my priestly duties up to standard. [might not]

Beileph, 1^st bond talk

Choose 'tell me about yourself.'

When I realized that little research has been pursued in regards to that subject matter, I was a vancancy that needed to be filled. [vacancy]

Beileph, 2^nd bond talk

Choose Beasts versus humans

In fact his behavior is so hard wired, they will both adopt themselves into other species groups if left alone. [behaviour]

Choice - 'Why do you want to believe?' [seems like like what do you want to believe?]

'Wipe them out.'

Surely there must be anothe, less severe, solution. [another]

Beileph, 3^rd bond talk

'It seems happy.'

Perhaps my Lady aura is also attractive to beasts? [my Lady/Lord's]

Beisel, 1^st bond talk

I sure hope they are treated you properly! You let me know if they step out of line. [treating you properly]

Beisel, 2^nd bond talk

As leader of the Merchant Guild, I have access to a lot of traded goods. Is there anything your looking for? [anything you're looking for]

Samuel, 2^nd bond talk

Ask why they have to close their eyes

It's best if my Lady is in a neutral state is possible. [is in as neutral a state as possible or is in a neutral state if possible]

Samuel, 3^rd bond talk

Back when the whispered were quieted underground, I assumed my anxiety was due to the environment. [back when  the whispers]

Samuel, 4^th bond talk

Ask for a hug

I'll never wish to make you feel uncomfortable, so please tell me when ever you need a hug from now on. [whenever instead of when ever]

Ruwin, friend talk, choose 'well done/good job'

He nods solemnly but can't fully surpress a creeping smile. [supress]

Ruwin, love talk, ask me anything

Than I can promise you I won't let you be disappointed. [Then I can promise]

We prisoners, often fought amongst ourselves. [punctuation not needed - We prisoners often fought]

Lor, giving oath ring

Would you be willing to meet me there for short hike? [for a short hike]

Samuel, giving oath ring

You must value me more for more than just my loyalty and service, my Lady- [You must value me for more than just...]

And Of course our relationship will mean more than just my fortune telling skills- [Unneeded capital letter]

Samuel, friend talk

Choose try eating some candy

The flavors vary from color to color, tasing vaguely fruity, ranging from mildly sweet to tangy. [tasting]

Choose - ask about candy shape and color

It's not unsual for parents and teachers to make things like to help faciliate conversation. [unusual and facilitate]

This time it's a yellow cup, representing air priest. [representing an air priest]

Choose red sword

Such a combination can be quite domineering by my lady is a hard person to predict. [but my Lady/Lord]

Choose red cup

Such a combination can be contradicting by my lady is also a contradiction in many ways. [same as above]

Katnir, love talk

Choose 'I'll give it to someone else here.'

Shouldn't I just enjoy the comfort of my Lady warmth and let it be at that? [Lady/Lord's]

I would say instead, 'my lady, I'm honored and elated that you think of me that way. [needs a ' on the end]

Beisel, friend talk

Wow! I always saw other girls walking together arm and arm like this- [walking together arm in arm]

(Not necessary to tell you but this scene was adorable and gave me a fuzzy tummy when I 'Aww'ed too hard. I wanted to pat her on the head because all she wanted was a best friend.)

Beisel, giving eternal pendant

Ah, haha! I suddenly feel so embarassed, my <name>. [embarrassed - and end with the name or my Lady/Lord, personally not sure which fits better]

Beisel, love talk

Choose 'Really? Thanks.'

I want to pick out your outfit next. Soemthing for our nest outting together. [something and outing]

You notice that she square is emptying and most of the patrons have moved on. [You notice that the square]

Beileph, love talk

Beileph is stands from his seat and pulls up a chair for you, inviting you to sit with him. [is at beginning of sentence is unnecessary]

Such as the dietarty habits, health concerns, and bowel movements of the beasts. [dietary]

Choose ask about beasts social habits

For instance, even the serpent and arachid can show signs on affection. [show signs of affection]

They will even go as far as to seek them out for the sole person of having companionship. [seek them out for the sole purpose of having companionship]

Choose 'Yes. You are more than your research.

He shurgs, looking very weary. [shrugs]

Even if you are the only one who understand me, I feel like that should be enough. [understands me]

Or where ever your next destination may be. [wherever instead of where ever]

Choose 'What are you thinking about?'

When I try to think of something else, my mind just keeps wander back to my work. [keeps wandering back to my work]

Hi thanks for replying (and so fast too, I didn't expect that)! I went through again to see if it worked this time and it did. It is possible that I had an older version as I'd ran it and left the tab open to try out after I'd finished my work, by the time I'd got around to trying BoC a few days had passed. You must have patched it during that time in between. I thought I'd reloaded the page but I guess not. Sorry to cause extra work for you but thank you for checking nonetheless! It really shows how much you care about this project and I can appreciate that.

And that's great about the downloadable option in the future. I'd be happy to buy it when book 1 is done and I prefer to actually own a copy of what I spend my money on. I do have mixed feelings about it being released book by book, but that's my own petty issue (I don't want to wait for the whole story but I do get to play it earlier than I would if you has released it as one long game. A conundrum indeed!)

Anyway, best wishes to you for the remainder of this year and the next, toodles!

Hello Llamagirl, I hope you are well! And many thanks for the game so far - it was very enjoyable and I have replayed a few times.

Unfortunately, I do not have tumblr to report this but I think I may have found a bug? If you refuse to perform magic for Gawain after his lute playing in the dragon hut, the options use magic still appears.  If this has been fixed whilst you were working on chapter 4 then forget that!

I have a few questions about the finished game in the future if you do not mind. Will it be in a html download format to play offline whenever? Also, I saw that you plan 4 books in Mordred's story. Will this be 4 separate games that we can import previous data to, like supernatural, or will it be one long game separated into parts?