No no, thank you! These are really valid points. I only had a vague idea of what I wanted to do for the story, and only really made one flimsy draft. Your ideas are a lot smarter for this lmao, I should've done something like that but just didn't think of it. I'm not gonna redo this story, but when I make more I'll keep your feedback in mind. Gotta look back and see if it all makes sense, think it out proper. Hopefully the next time I make something I won't be under time duress :').
Again thank you for the feedback, I really appreciate the honesty!