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I feel like some of the paragraphs could have been split into two or three paragraphs. Some of the sections could even have been split into multiple pages for readability. I first noticed this when I went to the pet store. The "Where to now?" page was an especially large text wall.

It was nice to see that the choices I made did have some bearing on the scenes, though I felt like some of them could have used a grammar touch-up.

I noticed that sometimes a pronoun would be capitalized in the wrong place. I don't know the exact way you formatted your variables, but did you have different variables for $they (he, she) and $theycap (He, She) or something similar to that?

I've never had a dog, so I can't really relate to a lot of the dog experiences, but the part about deciding whether or not to put down the dog made me cry -- we had to put down our cat earlier this month. That was completely accurate.

Thank you for the feedback! I worry about those walls of text. Splitting into multiple pages didn't seem like the right answer, but I should have split some paragraphs up, that's for sure. I'm used to novel writing, but I should have written it more like a newspaper column.

If there are any grammar mistakes or pronoun problems you know of off the top of your head, I would love to know about them so I can fix them. The way the pronouns work was when the player chooses male or female, the pronouns are set accordingly, so $pronoun is she, $pronouncap is She, $pronounpossess is her, etc. I know that at the end I was rushing a tad and for some reason kept adding capitals to things that shouldn't be capitalized. I actually uploaded the game a second time about five minutes after the initial upload because I thought I had found and fixed all of them, but I guess I didn't!

My condolences about your cat, losing a loved one like that is awful.