I can't, more like wouldn't make a huge review like @Ralkey, but I overall agree w/ his review.
This Visual Novel has tons of potential, sound effects are wonderful, and the story is interesting, pulling you in... I can see you trying animations/scenes that aren't common. 3D animation, as the camera flying around the room, while also having a POV of a drone.
I really look forward to what you make in the future, but especially this VN. You've done well for the intro/first chapter.
Appreciate you making this VN, and wish you the best.