Nice work! The music and art are appealing, and there is a lot of potential. I do wish that either the text were faster, or there was an option to auto-fill the dialogue box; because of this, any unnecessary words or lines tend to stick out, making the core mechanic somewhat frustrating. Although I'm far from an expert, if I may so bold (as I do see a lot of potential), I would recommend Strunk and White's "The Elements of Style."