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I come back to itch.io after a few stressful weeks to find out this IF was update two weeks ago! You posted more chapters faster than I thought.

I'm certainly not complaining and I'm definitely not disappointed, though that cliffhanger should be illegal 😂. I'm glad to see my suspicions from when I first read this were correct, I can't wait to see how these interactions will develop.

I love the build-up these last two chapters make; while the chapters before that show the wonder and curiosity of the characters as they are exposed to all these new things, now you can see them starting to fully process just how restricted the people of the City are and the anger and resentment practically radiates from them. Reading this feels like music that is slowly getting louder with each little act of rebellion until, hopefully in later chapters, it will reach into a big crescendo where the characters finally had enough. 

Thank you for the update, keep up the amazing work!

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Welcome back, Realpowermind! Thank you for taking the time to comment again, and my apologies for the cliffhanger. 😅 To be fair, I had much of chapters 8 and 9 already written when I first published this story. Now I’m feeling the pressure a little more, lol.

And you’re correct, everything is building toward an inevitable conflict, which may be coming sooner than you expect. 👀 Thank you again for the lovely comment, I love hearing from you!

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Just call me Power or Powermind! Take as much time as you need for the chapters, I'm sure they'll be good no matter how long. I'm just glad you're working on this IF because like we've discussed before, there are so many unfinished IFs on itch.io.

Now you got me intrigued for what's in store 🤔 May I ask how many chapters you plan on making this?

It's great hearing from you too! Love the new artwork Isabela made, by the way.

Hello, Power! There are 12 chapters planned but 12 is going to be a big one. I may split it up once I get into it. May depend on what readers want, too—whether you’d prefer updates or just wait to drop the end of the story, lol.

Thank you for your comment and I’m glad you enjoyed Isabela’s new artwork!