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Ahhhhhh, it's finished! Fir, you lying little snake! 😂

Like I said before, this ending is bittersweet for me. I'm glad to get my happy ending with Ferret and our daughter, (I'm sure I'll be stuck with bathing duty from now on), but it's sad to have this great work come to an end, it's one of my favorite post-apocalyptic IFs out there!

Great work as always! I love how each character got to fight the guard they each personally had a vendetta against. Heron against the Wasp that cruel to the feeders, Ferret against the Weasel who took away her child, and Lion against the Pig who took away his friend.  And marking a new start with a new journal entry was a brilliant way to bring it full circle!

I'm sure Fawn and Bison are looking on happily at us! Speaking of which, I had wished there was a scene where the whole City would've gotten to mourn those they lost properly, a memorial of some kind? But I guess with the amount of deaths the guard caused and the forced apathy the workers had to put on, it would be hard to remember all who were gone. 😓😓

Well done, Fir! You've earned a well deserved break!

Aww, I'm happy you remember me so!💜 I'll always enjoy returning to this IF and talking to you.

I won't lie either then, I've re-read her route multiple times so that I can gush over the moments with her. ☺️

It's always nice hearing from you!

YES!! Let the fighting begin! Incredible chapter as always, you can really feel every point of the story coming together and it brings that satisfying feel of completion. 

And awwwwwww, Ferret is so cute! Meeting the parent and naming them all the while being so bitter is so adorable🥰🥰. I'm glad she'll finally be able to do what she's been wanting to do since meeting her... take back from the guard. I really hope she gets to be a mother again, and I, in turn, as well.

I can't wait for the final chapter, take all the time you need for it. When that update comes, I'll be filled with a bittersweet feeling.

Bye Fir!

Shit... way to break my heart 💔Don't take me away from Ferret, please.

Amazing work as always, I can't wait to see how they can recover from this. Can't believe there's only two chapters left... 😢

Just call me Power or Powermind! Take as much time as you need for the chapters, I'm sure they'll be good no matter how long. I'm just glad you're working on this IF because like we've discussed before, there are so many unfinished IFs on itch.io.

Now you got me intrigued for what's in store 🤔 May I ask how many chapters you plan on making this?

It's great hearing from you too! Love the new artwork Isabela made, by the way.

I come back to itch.io after a few stressful weeks to find out this IF was update two weeks ago! You posted more chapters faster than I thought.

I'm certainly not complaining and I'm definitely not disappointed, though that cliffhanger should be illegal 😂. I'm glad to see my suspicions from when I first read this were correct, I can't wait to see how these interactions will develop.

I love the build-up these last two chapters make; while the chapters before that show the wonder and curiosity of the characters as they are exposed to all these new things, now you can see them starting to fully process just how restricted the people of the City are and the anger and resentment practically radiates from them. Reading this feels like music that is slowly getting louder with each little act of rebellion until, hopefully in later chapters, it will reach into a big crescendo where the characters finally had enough. 

Thank you for the update, keep up the amazing work!

Thank you for the reply! And as I said, after reading this work, I couldn't not show my adoration for it, so I'm glad to have this work to be the first (and quite possibly only) one I commented on.

And that makes sense about Chapbook, I've never made IFs of any kind nor know anything about Twine, so I'm good to just be able to read this in the first place. I've seen other comments asking about the save system as well, but there's no pressure to try to create one. If I want to remake a choice, I'll happily just quickly replay. I've done that plenty of times with other IFs when the last save point I made was further back in the story than I thought. And I agree about the novel-like format of Chapbook, it seems to fit with the writing well!

Dystopia/post-apocalypse is definitely an amazing genre, I used to take a class entirely focused on dystopian writing. Fahrenheit 451 is a great book, I've read it multiple times, though I can only say I read about a third of 1984 because the interactions and thought processes of Winston and Julia were kind of... uncomfortable. Though I can understand fans of book because from what I remember, the world 1984 created was very interesting and I saw many parallel concepts to real life.

I'm also glad that this is the kind of story that you've already written before and are remaking into an IF, meaning it's more likely that you'll actually finish this. It's so hard to find good quality and completed IFs on itch.io... 😭

Oh, there was also another compliment I forgot to give in my last comment! I thought the animal naming was really creative, it makes sense that everyone would name themselves after something they've only read in books. I didn't even connect the dots that they were all named after animals until I got to that part of the story. 😅And I had never seen the limited option of what to name yourself before, most other IFs allow you to type your own name into it, so I was surprised about that!

Warning: Small Spoilers!

Okay, so I never leave comments on pieces of work. I always just like to read them and let others comment their mutual appreciation to the author. But after reading this and reading your bio, (I always like to click on the author's profile of any IFs I like to see if they have any other work or recommendations), I felt like I just had to write my admiration of what you've written so far, so I created an account on itch.io just for it!

Everything is amazing so far, dystopian/post-apocalyptic are one of my favorite genres so my interest was peaked immediately. Kudos to both you and your sister for the awesome story telling, this reminds me of Fahrenheit 451, but it's still unique in another way. I love the switching back and forth between the MC and the diary entries of the first settlers of The City; it's interesting to see the development of what first started out as a way to help guide people and rebuild society, only to turn into something so controlling, restrictive, and what seems to be far away from the initial intentions of the author of the diary entries. 

The art is great, Isabela did an amazing job with that! I kept the story and this page on different tabs so that I can switch between to look at the characters again and imagine them better in my head as I continued reading. And the music fits perfectly with the story as well! I'm romancing Ferret and as I was imagining her scene in the rain, I couldn't help but notice the music you paired with it had fit so well. It felt like watching a dramatic scene from movie!

The only small critique I have is that I would like for there to be a place where I can click, save, and load my progress at different points of the story.

For the amount of effort you've clearly put into this, from the writing to the commissioned art to the pairing of music to different scenes, it's hard to believe that this if your first IF! I can't wait to see where you take this story and the interactions we'll get to have with the other characters. After finishing this story, if you ever decide to make any other IFs, you can guarantee I'll read those as well.

Astounding job so far, keep up with the good work!