Feed back so far?
For person not native speaking English you aren't have bad however my advise to find someone to edit it because you are close to some of these which is awesome.
I am native speaker but I not good with English either like most US is.
The bandit and the girl is too hard fight nerf them a little.
I think there a glitch with Sakraua where you put the documents and you can't enter at midnight and once you screw that up you can't do again.
You know if you work at midnight with Hinata I know it's a glitch but I would it count as overtime and get an extra payment in the game and I can exist in the morning.
I guess locking picking in the game yet?
For your first game I am looking forward I hope you add anal to the game I would like an anal sense with Hinata and Sukrua.