Thank you for sharing! This was my first published game and so a lot of rough mechanics have seen many revisions and updates. I would recommend checking out Wanderer - The Shadowed Realm (https://sleepysasquatch.itch.io/wanderer-the-shadowed-realm) as it structures the gameplay in a much easier to follow way while preserving the roll-and-write (journal) systems.
I'll be sure to read through your adventure sometime this week.