Good start! Renders are generally high-quality, and the character variation is much appreciated. I do have some pointers:
1. Grammar and spelling needs improvement. You probably need a native-level English speaker to proof-read this for you.
2. Render consistency. Characters seem to change proportions and/or looks between scenes, not least the male MC and his physiology/facial appearance.
3. Sandbox elements: There is no indication of which parts of the maps or sets are clickable, there is no 'calendar' for when certain events are and are not available, and there is no sense of progression for each character's route.
Other than the above, it's going great so far! Will updates be posted here on itch, or is there another page/site I can follow you on?