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Great choice to have an off-white background, it gives it a personality from the moment you open the booklet. I like your choices of artwork and the logo for Headless Press is brilliant.

I like the background or "Note" you provided on Succubi/Incubi, that's useful inside and outside of this adventure.

A different font in the table headings might help them stand out, since they share a color with some of the rows. There might be ellipsis missing in the second "In the Dungeon..." box on page 2.

I think you did a good job keeping the rooms on each floor interesting, none of them feel like 'filler'.

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Thanks for the feedback! There is a kind of silly story I'll share in a devlog about the colour choice, but I'm pretty keen on how it looks XD

Thanks! I wanted to provide a bit of context for why Ph'aarna is the way she is;  I have a slightly different metaphysics for magical/spiritual beings within the implied setting of the adventure that I will probably expand on in future releases. I didn't want to bog down the adventure and it is already pretty stuffed to the page limit, so I'm glad that got the general idea across!

I'll keep an eye out for that devlog - the silly story sounds oddly intriguing and it really was a brilliant color choice.