To me it goes way too hard for a shop music.
The rhapsodic aspect is a great for earthbound but would make more sense for a battle theme.
Even though I enjoyed most of the spyciness and politanal stuff happening, the section between 1:38 and 1:46 sound really hollow / bland to me.
Also the mixing seems fine at some spots and not so much at others (eg 0:44).
In the end even if I think it need to be perfected, I would love to hear more of this kind of stuff, its hard to compose, often time consumming, but it can bring us unique musical experience and awesome tracks. Keep it up!