This was great! Interesting premise and unique style. And I know you were pretty down on it, but I quite liked the non-linear aspect of it. Things like rechecking the body in the kitchen after the cat lady gives you his name is really cool! I do understand that it can be hard to write, and also kinda suck to have people just blow past stuff you put a lot of effort into, so it is a trade off. I think you did well with this though!