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Just realized I didn't gave you my feedback on the seventh chapter, so let's say it's time to do this. But sorry folks, it probably contains heavy spoilers, if you didn't play you'd better stop reading NOW.




'cause I'll start by the end, and by the sad news: the final scene of this chapter is the first and for now only thing I really disliked in your work. Let me explain.

First of all, it was really cliché. From the first image of the place, the first dialog line of the thug, I was thinking “No, he isn't going to do THAT?”, and that was exactly what you did. Even if I do like anticipating sometimes, this wasn't the good way to have it.

Then, I can see why you did something like that, Orion was indeed becoming too arrogant and all, and that would probably have positive outcomes. But this coming from random thugs while going to order pizzas sounds… disconnected? Not a huge fan of important lessons learnt from randomly chosen bad ways in your home town. Plus, Kredon feels suddenly way less enjoyable.

Finally, I don't think that works that much as a cliffhanger as, with the talk with Idriel and all, it made me feel like “Okay, so it's how the story ends” way more than “OMG I want to know more!”, which was supposed to be the aim of the sequence. Plus, of course I know he won't die, but, on the opposite of previous ones, it feels like there's no really “good” way to continue from this point. I mean, suddenly discovering magic works in the real world just because it's needed would be really weird, and conventional medicine would probably take time and thus lead to fail the pirate quest, which would be a shame.

(Could be a good thing that the rest of the team fulfills this quest while Orion is at the hospital, but as he was the only one having the map, that doesn't sound very plausible. I'd say, while being a literal Deus Ex Machina, Calypso finally finding a way to come in the real world could be the most elegant way.)

Now, to conclude on this point, probably have to say that I may have been a bit overreacting and trying to rationalize after that. Being autistic, I may be more sensitive to such things that you'd expect from usual players. But I had to write that down.


Well, and now that it's done, let's rewind to the beginning of the chapter and highlight way more positive aspects as, except for this final scene, you did a great work as usual.

Story developments are really cool. You managed to make things even more interesting with W. Bardot and the Founder, so now about this I can't wait to learn more. The details about the true nature of Eternum are really intriguing, and continue to shift us away from the thought premises.

In a way, it remind me an old game I played when I was little, called Breath of Fire Ⅲ, but in a reversed way. The old game starts in med/fan settings, and the more the story goes on, the more we discovered there's technology everywhere, ending in a complete SF environment. Your game starts with advanced, futuristic technology, and then we discover that's more something magical, which is very promising.

Story developments on Ekabar are also promising, I tried both the werewolves and vampires things and both were really fun. Villagers starting to reject magic and launching some crusade is intriguing, while still fitting the settings, so I wonder if it'll be a major plot thing or something more secondary.

It's still really fun to see how the characters react. The more or less inner monologues are a really good point (Alex's one was cute, and it was a good thing to have Orion's thoughts at the end of the class). The talk between Nancy and Dalia was really fun too, and I also especially loved Nancy's reaction about the need to pause a bit between the sessions. Just what was needed at this point.

And, of course, I can't wait to learn what Luna really saw about Annie (I may have a few ideas). Moreover, hearing the non-team players talking to each other about the development of the story (the Andromeda case, Orion's nickname…) adds to the life of the universe, which is pretty cool.

And, I have to say, even if I found the previous ones a bit boring, you made me laugh with the for-now-last appearance of Chop Chop. Wenlin is a good addition, and now I wonder where you're going with those two.


Outside from the story and characters, I really loved your choice of musics again. Shostakovitch Waltz №2, especially, was one I know for a long time and I really like, so it was a pleasant surprise to hear it there (just made me wonder something, but I'll say it later). Music themes from the pirate server were also really good. Now my playlist “Eternum OST” is up to 3h30, starts to be a bit long, but worth it ^^

Silverware is especially a really great song I discovered thanks to you, and hearing it coming again in Nova's scene made me wonder how much you're planing to re-use some of the previous great songs. For instance, it feels like “If I had a tail” could be a really cool recurring theme for Alex.

Also, a point about which I didn't talk enough in my previous reviews is how stunning some background renders are. Did especially notice it in the ruins of Ekabar, and later in Tortuga, but then it made me come back to previous sequences to look at them again, and some of the outsides of Blackridge cabin, or the castle in Warthogs, are also really cool. I even took some screenshots of scenes where we don't see anyone to use them as wallpapers.


Now, as usual, there's some things I liked less (but not disliked of course). I'm not really into car porn, for instance, so Penny's scene wasn't really for me (some things were fun, thought).

I also think Orion is a bit too muscular now. You know, really buff people are a typical male fantasy, so, as a woman, it pulls me a bit out of the story to read that all the girls in the group are fangirling about that. One or two of them could find it extra sexy, but it shouldn't be the whole team.

Even more with the difference between skin colors, in the scene with Nova it was a bit looking like she was fucking with a statue, which is a bit weird.

And, aside from those taste respects, there's some points I don't know if I'm just overthinking them or it's there's possible inconsistencies. Raised an eyebrow about El Coyote, but why not, just made me a bit perplex.

If I'm not wrong, the talk between Nancy and Dalia took place in Ion. Which mean the robot was looking for alien's infections in another server than Andromeda. Is it possible (without Calypso's help) to go from a server to another without logging off first? I was thinking it wasn't, but that would mean being alien infected isn't cured by the automatic full healing at logoff? That's a bit weird, isn't it?

Even more knowing about the astral projection thing: it could have explained this full healing by the fact that, while logging off, you just dismiss the previous projection and recreate another while logging in the next time. But then, the infection would have vanished too… except if it's parasitizing the inventory mechanism, maybe?

And well, the said thing with Shostakovitch. With the vampires, Orion immediately notices when the word “Romania” is said, as it's something from the real world NPC shouldn't known about. On the werewolves side, it's the same with “Egypt” and “Anubis”. But there's just no reaction at all when the names “Strauss” and “Tchaikovsky” are said, and no more when the waltz is chosen. So I wonder how they could unsuspiciously know about real life music and compositors, but shouldn't know at all about real life places or mythologies.

(Also, even if it's fun to see Mortimer throwing a sword at the first vampire, wonder if that's a really good think to do if they're supposed to be cursed people that may be saved.)

Then again, those are minor points, and it's perfectly normal to have such in a big story like this one, doesn't stop Eternum from being globally really great, of course.


Hope those thoughts can help! :-) Thanks again for the game, and I'm sure I'll like the next chapter!

Just one request, thought: it starts to be a big thing to download, wouldn't it be possible to have a “just update” file, to just get new content we don't already have downloaded?

Anyway, thanks for your work! :-)

I’m not as eloquent as you but i really would love to be. Well i was pleasantly impressed seeing your “work of art” as i would say.

And i wanted to ask you how can i achieve such a great level of creativity in speech (if i can say that). May be it seems like i’m stupid or like a cave man but the truth is i didn’t spend enough time reading which i regret so much I could “die” right now. 

If you could give me a few minutes of your time just to explain me How or give some suggestions i’d be overly grateful 🥹 

So In conclusion (i know i may sound ridiculous and annoying but..) could we stay in contact somehow, just to chat time-from-time ?

P.S. BTW My native language is Russian so I humbly apologize for my mistakes if there are some 

Well, judging by the other answer I got, I'm not that good to be understandable. Also, my way to talk comes probably highly from me being autistic, and I can't learn you that. Which is probably better for you.

Don't worry too much about your language, thought. I'm not a native English speaker either, and I started my first post here by denying any responsibility for eye injuries about my own language, but it seems like no one got hurt from that ^^

Don’t underestimate yourself. By reading your comments that were made a while back I realized you’re a very interesting person. The one thing you really have - your individuality. 

Did u forget about how others think and act? Don’t judge yourself by the other people’s opinion. I may be younger may be older *I’m 20btw* but I know for sure that other people can never be satisfied and nearly everyone is almost as subjective as possible. You’re amazing - objective view :)

As i said earlier you somehow caught my attention. Not as many people can do it. I was completely amazed by your thoughts and the way you express yourself so, you should know that you have a uniqueness. At first when saw your big comment a brief thought came into my mind like (..Nah i don’t wanna read this essay..) and then suddenly something captured my attention . I started reading and didn’t even notice i reached the end. And That’s how it happened :p That was like a breathtaking roller coaster 

And the easter eggs you use. Have i mentioned the other anime’s or art works? *Like that one from Gnome Ann :p* Not to talk about how they all completely fit into the whole picture.

*Easter eggs used here*:p (I know you will get it

Looking forward to chat again :)

Well, I don't know what to say now ^^" Thanks!

Beg my pardon...  I wanted to ask you about your disorder and how is it expressed. All I know is that it affects social life somehow and many people don’t even know they have it.
I might have it to some degree, who knows😜🤛🏻

May be it’s a little bit rude to ask but my curiosity won.. And again my apologies  young Lady 

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0.7 ending feels apt tho if you're familiar with Greek Mythology (which this AVN has a lot of references to), particularly Orion's namesake. Man was a literal giant and one of the best hunters there was, and was also boastful about it...but he eventually got himself killed after getting stung by a scorpion of all things (tho I suppose in other versions he got accidentally killed by the goddess Artemis who had a thing for him).

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Well, I'm sorry, but it looks like you missed my point there ^^"

Greek mythology (about which I talked in some of my previous feedbacks) is about symbolism, and I said that, symbolically speaking, I thought that was a good thing (indeed, Orion becoming arrogant to the point he did such a mistake, then becoming better after that, is a way more interesting character development than not becoming arrogant at all).

But what I wanted to point there, which has nothing to do with symbolism nor Greek mythology, is:

– That the way the mistake happened (bad talk with random thugs in a creepy street, which can't be compared to a scorpion) sounds like a cliché we already saw everywhere, far from the way Eternum usually plays with expectations, and also gives an unwanted sight about Kredon, as for now the danger there came from rich people like the Bardot, not from daily life (Alex's new neighborhood was sounding “creepy but rather safe” until her father came there, for instance).

– That the narrative mechanism is broken, as it's supposed to have us craving for more, while it looks more like a way to end the story, with Idriel's talk and all. On the sixth chapter, for instance, we didn't know what happened to Alex and had a thrill from W. Bardot knowing who Orion was, so it was a good cliffhanger. Before the heist, we stopped just at the “Open the door” pseudochoice, so we knew something was about to happen, but we didn't know what and how the plan would be changed. There, we don't know how Orion will finally survive, but there's huge probabilities that either it will break the current rules (with magic happening in the “real world”) or we will miss something fun we could have been expecting (the pirate quest), so it's harder to wait for more (I'm still curious about what would happen next, of course, but that's more from previous dialogues than from the supposed-to-be cliffhanger).

– That, even if it's possibly an overreaction due to being autistic, so I'm just highlighting this to allow other people to know something they couldn't anticipate, this scene made me feel bad, which isn't supposed to be a point of such a game. Didn't feel the same with the Thanatos encounter at the beginning of the third chapter, as it happened as a part of the action, so we saw what happened next while our mind was still processing the event. Here, we have the violent thing and immediate stop for months, so it's way harder to process. I think it's a good thing to know some people would react this way, to be able to chose what you want to do next time.

So, it's not at all about being or not familiar with Greek mythology, it's about how the story is told to us and about how some of us react to such things. Doesn't stop the game from being great, and I'd say it's a bit sad you choose to answer precisely on this part rather than on the two thirds of the post where I was emphasizing the really good aspects of the chapter or wondering about what we know of the lore.


(Also, Caribdis, when you'll read that, sorry for having to add an extra development to the bad point, I had to let you know how I reacted, but didn't want this to be the major point of the feedback, that's why I put it at the beginning, before talking more about the other points.)

Orrrrrrrr, maybe that's not the real world???? Just another realm like the matrix.

Hm… Was about to say that I was just calling it the same way than Orion and the others, no matter how much more real than the others it is, even if the story looks going “all the other worlds are real too” more than “this one isn't either”.

But now that you put it that way, it could also be possible that the next screen just after the 7th chapter end would be the Eternum death screen, and thus Orion waking up in another world, not having been knowing he was “connected” at this time. That could explain some things, such as excommunicated players dying “in the real world”, as they're now not allowed to go in this one too. Then again, that would cause some difficulties, as Orion would need to come back there anyway. And Thanatos' situation would become really weird, I think it works better if he's dead in “the real world” but still able to wander on the others, than if he left one of them, back to the “real real one”, but then join again the other ones without coming back in the “fake real”.

Anyway, all of this is about setup and payoff: nothing in-game that I can think about gave us anything to expect such an issue, just as nothing prepared us to having wounds magically cured in the “real world” (even if we technically already know magic can happen there: Luna's vision, at least, is something magical, but that's not the same kind of magic there). For instance, the reason why I said that having Calypso saving Orion would be an elegant issue despite being a Deus Ex Machina is because we did have some setup about that (previous talk about the exit portals, and the fact she asked not to be bothered at the beginning of the chapter because she was feeling she could soon be able to reach other places).

But, it could explain how he is 100% compatible and how his body changed so much in such a short time. Plus when we first see the founder he looks at you.... Though you could be right about him being dead in the real world but alive in the matrix.( Just easier to say it that way) Though he could be a NPC now and the girls have to use one of those boxes to try to get him back to being a "real boy" again.

hmmm… now consider the circumstances I can say you may have a point about Calypso being able to save Orion 🤔

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Thank you for your feedback, Atellia :D

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You're welcome, even if I would've liked have at least an answer to the last question about the download size issue :-þ


Don't hesitate to tell me if such posts help or not!