Heh! This is going to be a very challenging review to try to get in the space of this genre and bring feedback. And, the feedback I'm leaving is definitely just to give you what I think is the gap between where you're at and what the musicians of that time achieved - which is a lot.
Overall, the execution of achieving that 70s psychedelic rock sound is really very good. I think some of it maybe got a little repetitive, like some of it needs more development (you know, because I'm looking for what's the gap between you and artists of that era, but you've done a phenomenal job of capturing that sound).
In some places I feel like you're kind of flirting with that sort of mystical, psychedelic sound as well, but it's like it's not quite taking me quite all the way there. I compose from a pretty mystical place a lot of the time, so when I hear the music of that era, it definitely speaks to that .
I think you could pronounce the words more clearly as well. This is one of those cases where it's easy to get caught in the trap of emulating a style but where its a little slurred, so you can accidentally overdo the slurring. Like, Jimi Hendrix was actually articulating pretty clearly if you pay attention, even though it is stylistically slurred. I'd rerecord it with more annunciation and then dial it back - and definitely make sure you're using your voice and not trying to sound like anyone else. That's the only way to make it actually work for you.
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This phrase could be more clearly articulated. Getting that articulation right is really key for this kind of melody - it still sounds kind of slurred to my ears.
I think overall, the subtle thing I'm noticing is that I think in a lot of places you're kind of over-slurring the music to fit the style, but when you actually listen to a lot of the music from that time, it's actually very tight while *feeling* very loose, like the drugs they were taking was loosening them up while simultaneously making them play very tight, if that makes sense.
You've done a very good job here in general - I leave these reviews to be of service to your development as an artist.