Thank you so much for reviewing! After some discussion within the team we have decided to swap around some roles and try to rework our outline. Many ideas popped up along the way, without giving proper care to what we had in the beginning, including our characters. I think trying to spread out what we had over several days fed into disjointed settings and events. It became difficult to weave so many points together coherently. I hope to be more selective about our ideas and pacing as we review it in the future. Thank you again for your critique, it has been very helpful!