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I really loved this VN!  I actually clicked on it because it had a black lady on the display image (I'm black myself).  I love the text and descriptions, the emotions and the kink--it was all very good!

And, since you asked for constructive criticism: I got a little confused by the narration perspective at the beginning.  It might be helpful to have the girls use each other's names a little bit more in the beginning, to more firmly cement the narrative perspective, so I know who's holding whom and who's tightening their grip on whom.

Also, I REALLY liked that I could play it in-browser, without having to download it!

Thank-you for the lovely comment! I appreciate you letting me know what won over your click, and I’m glad you liked the feelings and descriptions and the kink too.

Your critique is fair and appreciated! I’ve been told once or twice that the alternating inner monologues are a bit confusing, but I think that using the characters’ names more at the start could help mitigate that. I’ll keep that in mind for my next editing pass!