May I suggest colour-coding the dialogue? Sometimes it's difficult to tell who is saying what, and also if it's spoken dialogue or narration/inner thoughts of the protag
Making the dialogue clearer is something I've been thinking about whilst i've been working on other stuff.
I would like to use the text colours to enhance the dialogue itself and use a different method to make it more clear who's speaking, which also applies to Phim's inner monologue.
With that in mind though, colour coding the dialogue is way easier, so I might do it anyways for the time being until I can create a different way, and then see what people in general prefer.
Thank you for the feedback, I greatly appreciate it!~ <3