I AM RATING THESE ALL THESE JAM SUBMISSIONS RELATIVE TO ONE ANOTHER. THERE ARE HIGH HIGHS AND LOW LOWS BUT PLEASE DON’T TAKE THIS TOO PERSONALLY, AFTERALL, WE ALL ONLY HAD A MONTH.
Implementation of Theme (1):
I could not gleam a theme from this during my stream and the creator had to offer me an explanation that the MC’s powers expand through their isekai-ing.
Story (2):
Considering how short it is, it did not waste any of its words in giving a confusing tale. Most of the time, I like confusing tales but I was not feeling this one. It did not overstay its welcome.
Presentation (1):
I feel like if that had been made from MAY WOLF 2023, I would be able to give it a 2 instead of a 1. I do think that the monsters that you made gave it a solid identity in the Jam.
Creativity (1):
Most of my points for Story carry over into this.
Total (5):
I know you as someone on the Echo Server that has played a lot of JVN’s and it really shows here. I am not saying that’s a negative thing, it just gives it more of an identity with how the story is told. There’s a certain story-rhythm that now that I’m about a third done with Tsukihime that I remember in here.
Keep writing and I do hope that you make a sequel to this which you mentioned in the stream.