I AM RATING THESE ALL THESE JAM SUBMISSIONS RELATIVE TO ONE ANOTHER. THERE ARE HIGH HIGHS AND LOW LOWS BUT PLEASE DON’T TAKE THIS TOO PERSONALLY, AFTERALL, WE ALL ONLY HAD A MONTH.
Implementation of Theme (5):
This certainly deserved to get the 2’nd Place Award out of all the Submissions. The bracelet cop-out was masterful and the less I say about expanding dick, tehe, the better. The only thing is that you won’t be able to pull the same trick twice if you enter another Jam like this in the future.
Story (5):
Besides biting off a bit more than you could chew with the scope of this VN, everything with the set up was perfect.
There were a certain point in the story where I kept thinking that this sounded like Paul-Loup or Charles from Alones but I thought that there was no way it could be part of the same universe. Then the ending happened and made me question everything. If Alones has MPreg in it that will be so awesome and not in a kinky way.
Really glad that you decided to focus on the ending moreso than the middle of the VN. I would I could have done the same thing with Wolf Bolo Two but I don’t think I could pull it off as well as you.
Presentation (5):
Wacky put his entire Wackussy into this.
I was shocked to find out from Bedan that a lot of this was drawn on paper while you were commuting to your day job. I’m nervous to play even SFW Furry Visual Novels in public, let alone draw smut for them.
The bit about having the sloth be transparent had me in tears it was so good.
The soundtrack was great.
One day, we will get a CG of Tino and Alenzo getting that sand in their cheeks if you know what I mean. WINK WONK.
Creativity (5):
The very French-piled WackyWoof making a VN set in the Silver State was kind of out of nowhere for me.
I now kind of what to go to Burning Man IRL but the more I think about it, the more it seems like a horrible tourist trap that you can’t escape from, like going to New Year’s Eve in Times Square. Good thing that DenFur is happening around the time it is set to happen in 2025 so I don’t need to make a choice. hehehe
If anyone wants another desert based VN after finishing all of what the Echo Series has to offer, I’ll shoving this down their snoots and seeing if they want to burn too.
Total (20):
After WackyWoof gooberishly submitted Alones to MAY WOLF 2023 since he didn’t understand the Jam, awarding him a perfect score from me for MAY WOLF 204 is somewhat of a silly redemption arc.
Every time that I go to a Furry Convention after reading this Submission, all I can think about as the Post-Con Depression starts to sink in is the ending of this VN. Not everyone can be their true-selves IRL all the time. It’s such a great analogy to that. I’m fathomed that Wacky was about to pull this off with what little Con Experience I believe he has. It makes me want to replay this again. It makes me want for the VN to be finished but alas Alones comes first.
It look at from me not to mention the Geneva Conventions in thing Jam Comment.