I wonder what's in that joint that smell bad.
Those things usually have a really sweet and nice smell. Far nicer than regular cigarettes.
So it must be something else in it for it to smell bad. oO
(Or maybe she just have a very different taste in smells than me and those I've known. lol)
Wow... 16 and having a chaperone / not being allowed to date...
Her parents are assholes. >_>
Like, really bitchy ones....
Although I guess some parents are...
This game is pretty good at capturing high school I think.
(Can't be too sure, -I- was the weird kid that scared people off in high school. lol
But it looks like it should be normal school life. From what I've heard anyway. So good job on that. ^_^)
I really like Tylor tho.
I keep hoping the mc will be pulled into his world and chill out more. She clearly needs it.
...I don't like Reese tho.
Bit high-strung about things. Sounds like his sister's father instead of her brother. (Not that I'm an expert on sibling relationships.)
Two finger salute the british way, oooooorrr.....? xD
If he likes White Fang, she should have suggest he reads Call of the Wild. lol
He might like it better, seeing as the mirror story have the dog become free as a wolf in the end, instead of lazy and captive.
(Not that she looks like the kind of girl who'd even know what it is. The mc I mean.)
I see why the mc thinks Tyler is nice tho.
If my brother was stuck outside, even if it was a snowstorm I'd not lift a finger to help. (thieving little brat.) Tho I'm sure the feeling is mutual.
Anyway....
Tyler is really sweet. As far as I can tell he's the typical 'bad boy with a heart of gold'.
I guess that's something most girls love.
He's well written for that role too.
Nice, but without fully loosing his edge.
I'm a little sad it's more of a reform the bad guy story than a tempt the saint to sin kinda story. Or at least meeting in the middle, bit of sin, bit improved grades, that kinda shit.
'drunken viceral rants' lol Does he listen to Sex Pistols? :p
(Nothing against them, but they -litterally- have a song called 'too drunk to fuck'. xD )
I like the mc less and less... VERY stuck-up girl.
But I will concede that the two lovers being polar opposites adds to the conflict that drives all good stories.
What I miss seeing is character growth.
(Although this may be one of the rare few stories that are good enough that it is character growth lacking that's the issue. Even some of the more popular published-for-real type games lack that sometimes.
But it IS something to consider. It helps improve a story when the characters grow and change over the course of the story.)
An absolutly beautiful story!
The ending was wonderful --but it cut off a little abruptly.
(Is whiplash ending a thing? lol)
If you can code it to fade out slowly, it would lessen the shock.
And maybe add some 'the end' shit to it or something.
The artwork is good, and the writing is very good.
The story might have benefited from a few calm moments here and there (because of the overall aggressive tone of it) but regardless it's an amazing story. ^_^
(And don't get me wrong: this type of story fits the aggressive undertone, nothing wrong with that. But having softer moments here and there will help contrast it and give the readers some breathing-room.
You have some that are a little bit soft, but it could benefit from a bit more.
Just a few tips. Use them or not as you please.)
Do you plan to post this on Steam at some point?
I need to know if I should look for it so I can add it to my wishlist there. ^_^