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I'm not an Arthur man, but, I must admit that that scene in the glowing waters was beautiful artistically and the written words were touching too. I was hoping to speak to Nomax, but I ended up pretty satisfied with the update after Arthur's scene alone even if Wolf route is going through a rough patch. Great job on the art, truly a set of amazing pieces with Arthur and the Wolf + Raj variations!

I fear I may have missed a few typos, seeing as I kinda forgot about proofreading, but, what I recalled is here.

"I wouldn not dare claim otherwise. I am happy to stay in the realm of beauty and leave mathematics to more capable individuals like yourself, Mr. Hudson." 

"Small...

useless...

Just as Arthur assumes you to be." (capitalization on 'useless', though uncertain if this was intended to be stylistic)

"The wind has dutifully moved ships since time immemorial. And besides, sir - would you sleep comfortably knowing there's a blazing furnace sitting below deck, waiting for a stray spark to ignite it" (missing question mark)

"Navy ships already have to deal with etensive precautions to minimize the chance of the magazine storage igniting and blowing up the ship. [cont.]"

"I don't think there's time time-"

"Well, I'm a Spaniard if the name and accent hadn't fooled you, but that doesn't mean I know my way around a little Moorish." (Given context after, Torres does know a little Moorish (given that is the language 'Ahlan' is from) thus double negative would be fine here)

"There's got to be some other reputable ships there. Maybe a few criss-crossing the mediterranean if I still needed to learn the ropes." (capitalization)

"Hey, big guy! Don't didn't anybody teach you any manners?" ()

"I'm a good listenener."

"It feels like almost a minute passes as the boat sways lazily, raindrops falling one after another, the time between them getting slowly growing longer." (Unsure if this is technically wrong as opposed to just being kind of awkwardly worded, personally I'd cut 'getting' here.)

Also, not a typo but man... I hadn't read the Leave path for Wolf when I first started my typo collecting and ooooof Wolf is just the king of breaking hearts over and over...

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One more, "You know who you are. Mr. Locked in the castle's food storage" (Should be a period at the end (granted, I don't usually bother correcting for that since it's minor and common), but stylistically, I wonder if you/people would prefer title case as opposed to sentence case after Mr. in this sentence. Personally, I feel like I see title case for frequently in these types of situations and I prefer it, but if you prefer it this way, I guess it might not be strictly wrong per se and be more preference?)

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Hey hey, thank you for keeping your eyes open again. I mean i certainly won't hold it against you if you missed some, because clearly, despite our best efforts we have plenty slipping through the cracks. So yeah, thank you very very much for your efforts. Which, by the way, would you like to be added to the credits under the special thanks section? I feel like you've helped along so regularly that you certainly deserve it. Lemme know if you'd like to be included and which name you'd prefer to be listed.

And I'm glad to hear! Was the writer for the Arthur scene myself, so I'm doubly happy that people really seem to enjoy that one and that managed to do it justice. Especially given that Arthur (deliberately ofc.) wasn't the most likeable character during this day. So I really needed to hit the target there. :D

(Oh also, thanks for putting a name on the Title Case/Sentence Case thing for me.)

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Sure! If you're offering, I'd be happy to be added as InvokingAzure.

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Sweet! Yep added you going forward :)