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Good job Elena :) I think you captured the medieval vibes very well. I'm a fan of the instances where standard sentence structure is sacrificed for rhyme/rhythm, such as "as if by lightning struck". However, I do struggle with the times where a rhyming pair begs me to mispronounce a word. "by"/"plenty", for instance. Perhaps this is part of the style but I cannot deny that it threw me off a bit. Great story overall! If you want to check out my work, I would appreciate feedback as well :)

Thank you for your detailed comment! Regarding the "by/plenty" instance, it is the only pair in the whole poetry collection where the flow is broken. I was too tired to try and find a better replacement for "plenty" so I just left it be. Glad you enjoyed the rest though!