KINO IS IN STORE
Your writing style is a little awkward at times, in that I see you want to make things clear for the audience, but I'd rather you were more trusting of the readers. That aside, the narrative was enthralling, I didn't even notice I had just been reading for a while. Shame it ended so soon, I was ready to have so much reading to do I'd have to come back to it a few times.