Concepts & Originality 3/5
The premise is good and characterization is excellent. My only complaint is how much it feels like I'm just reading a 40k story set in the Taros campaign. Not really much of a complaint, I like 40k (and I'm a guard player at that), but it does ding the "originality" a bit.
Flow & Clarity 5/5
The story is well written and I didn't notice any errors or have any hangups on my read-through. A very pleasant read that I enjoyed quite a bit.
Adherence to Theme 5/5
I think you nailed the theme pretty well, focusing entirely on an "unusual" resource in warfare. Nicely done. On that note, I retire and take my leave.
If you want to discuss any of my feedback/ratings, feel free to @ me on the OPR discord.