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This was pretty good, save for the punctuation and structure for me personally. Gabhammer seemed mostly unbothered by much of the situation he was in, which made the ending feel a bit unemotional, not sure if that was intentional.

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Very valid point on how unbothered he seemed,  I ended up cutting a line about Gabhammar having to pull himself together before clearing out the captain's chair and I think the story really suffered for it. In general this story's definitely suffered from the amount of lines I had to cut (and planned setups I had to leave unresolved) to get the formatting right. Honestly I feel like I rushed this one too much. 
Cheers for the useful feedback!