If you want to work on your writing skills, I can recommend Brandon McNulty's youtube chanal, and the book "Save the Cat Writes a Novel".
(The book also have a variant for screenplays, if that's better for games like this.)
Although you're already head and shoulders over most games here, it never hurts improving more.
Which is probably why you're head and shoulders above the rest with that thinking. lol7
Awwww.... *pouts*
I'd say I'd help you out, but I am nowhere near as good at writing NSFW scenes as I wish I was.
It'd probably come out sounding like a bad version of a Marquis de Sade novel, cuz he's my favorite author. lol
I'm now-where near as good a writer as you.
I'd happily help you become less shy if you want tho. ^_^
...but I fear your head might explode instead with my libertine mindset.
If you need ideas to polish, I could easily write something tho.
Although I suppose I'd have to play the bird brains to get a feel for their personality if I were to try that.
I fear I was too wrapped up in obsessing over my darling lizard to notice anyone else. ^_^
It might have something to do with the fact that most people do not actually study the bible.
They listen to what their preacher (or tv shows) says, merge it with modern ethics, and call it faith, when it's more of a hap-hazard pick-and-choose version of something that makes them feel good about dying.
And I am more of a scholar.
I've studied the topic for years.
Islam is different, if based on the same basic religion.
(Both types can be traced back to Zoriasterism for that matter.)
I can't say I have studied that holy book specifically, but I was under the impression there was no Hell in that religion?
Does it specifically state those things in the book, or is it a human interpretation of the text that may or may not be politically motivated as a way to control people?
Humans are always fallible after all.
That's the biggest flaw with 'interpreting' holy books; Everyone who does so have their own agenda.
The only real truth is what is clearly stated on paper. In the original version of it.
I wonder tho, if the talk of the torturer wearing you own face is meant as a metaphor for guilt.
Which would mean you essentially torment yourself because you feel guilty.
It is a known fact that you don't exactly have a body after you die, so how do you feel physical torture without a body capable of feeling pain?
Would it not make more sense if the pain was mental? And the description of the torment a human attempt to describe what cannot truly be described?
Budhism I am more familiar with.
Few things terrifies me quite so much as Nirvana. *shudders*
But I admit I am far from fully grasping what happens after death, beyond what is "common knowledge", which is usually not correct at all, twisted to fit the individual person and place, and what they consider morals and ethics.
I DO know that the ACTUAL writings of Buddha is massively mis-represented, however.
He insisted on NO feelings, for one thing.
Do not feel hate. Do not feel love. Do not feel sadness. Do not feel joy. Nothing.
It does not encourage you to care about other people either, simply to detach yourself from them.
To neither hurt nor help them, if my memory serves me right.
(I have read the translation of a few of his original texts.)
Mmh... Japan have something more similar to Hell. Tho I am vague on what.
Chinese mythology.... I think it's more similar to Hades/Hel --an underworld without torment or feelings.
Practically Nirvana, but with negative intonations. lol
But I am extremely iffy on Chinese mythology, and only a little more knowledgeable on Japanese.
So don't take my word for it on those two. It requires more studies.
Actually, there is a place between the old and the new testament when Satan's role changed.
In the old testament he was more used by g-d, but at some point he broke free and took control instead.
Of course... he also used to make bets with g-d, such as the one with job, where g-d let him ruin a man's life, kill his wife and children whom he loved, for no other reason to prove a point.
(And if you have ever met someone who grieves for a loved one, you know that replacing them with new wife and kids does nothing to dim the pain of the loss of the old ones. So it's pretty cruel.)
And, of course, one must consider how much is propaganda, seeing as the enemy of the Devil is not likely to portray him in a good light.
If you spend half a second studying things like WW2 and the Vietnam War you quickly see how different it looks from the different sides.
But back to the topic of Visual Novels....
If you DO want to try and make NSFW content tho, I would be happy to help you out.
Because I really do love this game, and want to see it.
I am sadly not that good at drawing people, but I do have -some- skills in writing.
It would almost certainly need some editing, however, to live up to your story's style and skill.
(And a better way to exchange information than a public comment section. lol)
So just tell me if you want me to try it. I'd love to see this game become even more amazing than it already is. ^_^