(Your game is in 10:52. I also did a no commentary, but it has a different slot, and edited the ends.)
It's a good short of a pilot vn/game, which shows some promise on your studio. I really like the voice acting, it's very good! I guess it
just needs to match the dialogue as well and ended up reading the rest of the dialogue as well, but I can understand, it's your first time. Artistry and style is pretty cool! Noa's very cute going tbh on that one. Music is also amazing! It really shows just as how you describe it on your page. Overall, I enjoyed this one. The other reason I checked this out, is also as well being a TyranoBuilder. I haven't seen that much of the engine, aside from 1 or 2 games I've played a while I guess.
So yeah, I hope you do guys pretty well onto your next stories!