Loved it! I felt like I knew where this was going, comfortably, until the narrative lurched unpleasantly off the expected path.
The details were beautiful, and really pulled me inside the player character's head (the "we want the redhead" section in particular made me feel so uncomfortable - in a good way). The final twist initially felt jarring - I needed to go back reconsider everything we'd learned about the player character and her world - once the twist slotted back into place, it felt all the more sad, and satisfying.
The metafictional touches to the final twist resonated - rather than feeling like cleverness for its own sake they really helped to add an extra perspective on the themes of the story, and raise some questions about the way our experiences chime with the narratives we pass through.
Really well written!