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Nice work! This is a solid entry that with some polish could be really good! I've said it before on other entries, but I always appreciate original artwork in RPGmaker games. It really makes them stand out. I didn't even mind the battles with what appeared to be concept art. It seems a little unfinished, but I can see the vision of where this could be going.

The gameplay was fine, if a little difficult at first. The boss was way easier for me then the basic demons for some reason. My biggest critique is in the writing. I really like the story itself, but the actually dialogue is a little rough and has typos. I assume this is related to time, as this was a jam, but it stood out to me.

And as others have commented... darn! A cliffhanger! Leaves you wondering whats next. Hopefully you'll be continuing this project!

Thanks for your critique. English is not my native language so I have a hard time doing good dialogue. Have you any tips or reference I can use to improve my writing?

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I can imagine that would be difficult! I only speak/write a single language unfortunately. (Apologies to my language teachers in high school and middle school ;-; )

My first thought would be to team up with someone who can translate your writing. This would allow you to write the text and dialogue in your native language, and then let someone take care of making it smooth in another language.

If that's not an option, then I'd suggest using something like Google Docs or Microsoft Word. I actually do this all the time. English is my native language, but I'm no master writer. While using Google Docs or Word won't make things perfect, they'll at least perform a basic spelling and grammar check. I do all my writing in one of those programs, and then copy/paste it into the game engine.

I hope that's helpful to you! Keep up the good work. :)