Hey guys!
So, to go with everyone else, loved the art. It's not a style I see often in visual novels, but it fit in so well. I think it matched well with the atmosphere of the game. I loved the change in emotions.
The dialogue, while funny, bounced around from one idea to the next. It felt smooshed together, and I had a hard time keeping up with what was going on. It ran straight from one joke or idea to the next, without many cuts in between.
There were some grammatical issues, but given that it's told from the mindset of a 11 3/4 year old, and a comedic game, It added to the affect.
You had me laughing at the battle scenes. I actually replayed those to see all the options given. My favorite is still the cat in the alleyway, because it was so unexpected. I fell into the trap of thinking it was going to end a different way, and I was wonderfully surprised.
I wasn't sure about the music at first, but that's just my own biased opinion and nothing about the game. I did change my tune when they went into the underground, it was very catchy and easy to listen to while playing.
Game mechanic wise, I saw no surface issues and the game saved beautifully. All the preference options worked.
All in all, great job guys! I look forward to seeing what else you have up your sleeve.