Overall, the story, though it seems interesting, is a bit too confusing, and the presentation doesn't help much.
Oh, and I see you tried to make it saving/loading impossible. Nice try, but I can save by pressing escape. Next time, when disabling save/load, delete the filepicker, save, and load screens, or all of the Save/Load section, from screens.rpy. Though I don't see a real reason to disable saving and loading; if anything, it just makes things more painful for the player.
I'm also did the WAG challenge, by the way. You can find my game, Literate, here: http://itch.io/jam/wag-challenge/rate/29610
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