So, first of all, thank you for the big, detailed answer. Criticism is the best reason to move forward, not to please everyone, but I try. So, in order.
1. Writing the text. I know exactly what you're talking about. Errors, crooked wording, and long sentences without time. Unfortunately, my native language syntax is very different. A banal example is the simple phrase I love you! = I love you! = Я люблю тебя! I can say in Russian: Я ТЕБЯ люблю! or Я люблю ТЕБЯ! or Тебя люблю Я! And in English, unfortunately, the wording is the same. In addition, long sentences are rare in English, and in Russian long sentences with lots of commas are the norm. I have a text editor, in the new update, which will not be released until the 30th, I did a lot of work with it, but only in the first Chapter. Well, a little in the second.
2. About the dominance part. I understand perfectly well, now there is a scene in the shower in which the girl licks the main character's pussy, but otherwise everything is just contained in the dialogues and attitude to us. However, this does not mean that they will not be there later. The game will be bigger, much more, and it is extremely variable. There will be more and more endings, and believe me, in the future, the dominance will be more pronounced.
3. Drawings... I am well aware that this is a weak part of the game. I do it alone. There are no artists, there is a person who wrote a couple of musical compositions, but there are no artists. To be honest, I often draw art, since I can't draw using references as the basis, I don't take them, but redraw them. It also takes a lot of time, and it's probably obvious that making such a variable game and drawing everything yourself is quite enough... It's hard. Truth. I am thinking of using the services of an artist, but only in the next project.
4. As for the fourth problem, it might be better if you sent an error report or attached a screenshot so that I could understand what exactly is going on and solve the problem.
Thank you for your feedback and have a nice game)