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It's a pretty great game, but I've got a few issues, sorry if I sound harsh. 1. I get pulled out of the game sometimes by the mistakes in wording, not blaming you, learning more than one language is difficult (and so is just speaking it), but if you know anyone who speaks english well or is native to somewhere english is spoken, ask them to proofread. It would improve the game so much. 

Secondly, it seems as you have to make a choice. Either be incredibly subby and get most of the sexual scenes, or go the dominant  way and get a lot less. So I suggest either adding more scenes for dominant currently (like when the Snake girl askes you to massage her feet, if your stats allow it, you can make her massage/and lick yours. Or (I assume this is what you plan on doing but Ima say it anyway) add more scenes in the future. So in the beginning you get all the sub sex scenes and in the end you get the dom. Otherwise, the high position state really fucks with the lewd part of this game and that's lame

Third (not an issue just something I'm confused about) . Their seems to be multiple different art styles in this, so are their multiple artists working on this? Or is some of it narrowed art. It was just kinda confusing when I see this character like this, then she moves and she just looks a bit different. All of the art is good and for sure better than what I can do, but it's not consistent  which kinda confuses me.

Fourth, their seems to be a bug loading or presenting an image. You can skip through the scene, I'm pretty sure it's a shower scene, but I'd like to see what's happening.

Besides that I love the game. I love the plot. And I love the characters

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So, first of all, thank you for the big, detailed answer. Criticism is the best reason to move forward, not to please everyone, but I try. So, in order.

1. Writing the text. I know exactly what you're talking about. Errors, crooked wording, and long sentences without time. Unfortunately, my native language syntax is very different. A banal example is the simple phrase I love you! = I love you! = Я люблю тебя! I can say in Russian: Я ТЕБЯ люблю! or Я люблю ТЕБЯ! or Тебя люблю Я! And in English, unfortunately, the wording is the same. In addition, long sentences are rare in English, and in Russian long sentences with lots of commas are the norm. I have a text editor, in the new update, which will not be released until the 30th, I did a lot of work with it, but only in the first Chapter. Well, a little in the second.

2. About the dominance part. I understand perfectly well, now there is a scene in the shower in which the girl licks the main character's pussy, but otherwise everything is just contained in the dialogues and attitude to us. However, this does not mean that they will not be there later. The game will be bigger, much more, and it is extremely variable. There will be more and more endings, and believe me, in the future, the dominance will be more pronounced.

3. Drawings... I am well aware that this is a weak part of the game. I do it alone. There are no artists, there is a person who wrote a couple of musical compositions, but there are no artists. To be honest, I often draw art, since I can't draw using references as the basis, I don't take them, but redraw them. It also takes a lot of time, and it's probably obvious that making such a variable game and drawing everything yourself is quite enough... It's hard. Truth. I am thinking of using the services of an artist, but only in the next project.

4. As for the fourth problem, it might be better if you sent an error report or attached a screenshot so that I could understand what exactly is going on and solve the problem. 

Thank you for your feedback and have a nice game)