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okay so i have some thoughts after making may way to the first 4 chapters of the game, the parts where i am at was the revealing truth of the Chief Daniella how she was the major cause of her betrayal and dishonesty and destruction of her society, and OMG it was really good! and i want to share some thoughts on how you can improve your game and I REALLY LOVE THIS Visual Novel and i normally do not view horror content genres but your works has a place in my collection of  Visual Novels.

i love the flow of the pacing where i can just space bar my way through the story and the story's pacing of exposition and character development was put really well, and i hope to learn about Jake and how he was part if the team of Jacob, louis and Zara and the boss.

but my a few issues is the art pieces, i was hoping are you going to transform into digital art at some point but i like how they are drafts and i hope to see more improved content, also animations of attacks and monsters and the design choices for the story locations as well for their background designs, but they do serve their purposes well.

 also i really enjoyed the world building and lore and the fourth wall breaking from the first scenes of the game, and i like the anime aesthetic, 
and i like how you have a PERSONA with Furry dogs as a FURSONA its funny and i like the references of transforming like from a game of Bloody Fury from GameCube games, characters from humans transform into their BEAST forms to fight against their opponents.

so far you have my vote as 5/10, you have a strong story, strong story development and it also goes with your character development, i like the immersion of the battles scenes, and I ACTUALLY cared about your characters and may god i felt really bad for Jacob after the Thunderbird battle boss rounds, and i felt bad about Daniella and i really hope she gets a redemption arc for her story cause she really needs her resolution after what she has done, and also keep your story pacing and do not rush it it is balanced enough and i like it a lot!!!

this part is where i found a few problems and suggestions to improve your visual novel: 

PART !:  of the organization side of your game project folders for example, in your 'images' folder, you have all your art assets all over the place, it would help your game be more organized in where your images are located in their own respective folders.
Make more folders in your 'images' folder based on characters' names, 'backgrounds', 'illustrations', 'locations', 'special effects', or 'attack animations screens', and 'monsters' and that way if you improve this part of your images folder, it will look more professional and more organized.

PART 2:
Okay the art issues is that they deserve a revised versions in digital art, keep your art consistent which is there from the drawings i have seen in the game, and keep your game fonts as well, 
The music is good keep it i like the ambience and it works well and fits in well in the game.
The sound Effects/ FX are bit troubling, i notice the main menu, and UI Screens have 2 mouse click interaction sounds that are referenced from 'Kingdom Hearts' games and i recommend that your replace them, though the sounds fit in the game, it is part of a copyrighted issues that you may experience unless you have licenses for those sounds then you are good, but i think a better replacement is in need for that and its okay if you need sounds for clicking interactions.

part 3 technical issues, can you add a 'back' option to rewind the story at any time, i think this helps in case users failed to see the texts after using the left click or space bar too many times to progress the next text dialogues that the user may have missed a text.

all issues are from Build THE BEAST 1.58 build!!