So,
I am loving this VN, The characters (with the exception of Mark....) The character development is interesting to say the least, and the pacing seems... Sporadic. I would have to say that the Art is my favorite part thus far.
I do however have a few problems: the pacing is sporadic. There is a lot of Fluff that is thrown in the writing that is arduous to get through at best (i.e: "I should probably get the lights!", "Don't forget to turn the lights out!", etc. Etc.) The fluff is very much so a thing. It feels as though the writing process was put to a halt and to fill blank space there was just more... Blank space to fill it. It all seems a bit forced and makes certain parts just really boring.
The awkward is strong in this, I get some people are really awkward but not everyone should be awkward. You have different personalities that all kind of blend together when you incorporate awkward. At times I wasn't sure who I was talking to because their responses were just awkward.
I do expect a lot from this VN though, it has a ton of potential, and even more so has the potential to just have great direction. Given some editing and removal of fluff this would quickly become a favorite but until then this is all very clunky and awkward.