Right out the gate without even playing the game I can say: I hope Ruby and Jade (see animated screenshot above) being twins has a meaningful impact on the story - because from a gameplay perspective, two mayor characters looking the same adds tedium and might look rather lazy on your part.
And to avoid being misunderstood: If you want to keep the game world that way (because it does add to the story) that’s fine. But maybe you shouldn’t put that part into your promotional material.
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Jade and Ruby being twins has a lot of impact on the story. There are also over 10 bachelors in total which look totally different and most of them most will be revealed the following months. So i hope this "lazy" impression will not come up.
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"If you want to keep the game world that way (because it does add to the story) that’s fine. But maybe you shouldn’t put that part into your promotional material"
So i shouldnt show both sisters together becasue they are looking too similar?
I was talking about your promotional material. Like I said: It’s fine if you want them to be twins, but just looking at this page, all I see are some blobs and three humanoid character - two of which have the same skin and artwork… I was surprised when you wrote that the game had that many characters. That’s great. You should show them in a lineup or at some kind of community dinner or event, so the reader gets the right impression about Ova Magica.
A bit of an aside, but I wanted to give you the heads-up: “over 10 bachelors in total” will be read as “exactly 11 bachelors - one of which isn’t developed yet”. It’d like somebody stating that their game was “in the Top 7 of such-and-such games” meaning “it was in a Top 10 and made seventh place”.
Thank you for explaining this helps a lot!
I will show the variety of characters in the next promotional material better!
My Kickstarter launches in February and for that i am working hard to put all things together and preparing a lot
If you have some time left maybe you try the tech demo and leave me some feedback to improve?
