I felt like this was a really neat way to explore this kind of story. I enjoyed the setting and the fact that, in spite of them being 'worthless grunts', I was concerned with the welfare of those I was responsible for. It's a small detail, but the last line which said 'keep your mouth shut ... you're promotion will be handled in person" was such sinister way to cap off the players 'character'.
I'm generally a fan of these types of game systems, the disembodied drone handling strategy & with a view of the surrounds. As you likely remember from the comments you left on my submission, there are a number of issues to be faced in designing this kind of game space; legibility vs challenge, uniformity vs variety, realism vs practicality. I feel that we ended up on opposing ends of the same problems; namely that this games environment is more regular and understandable, but can feel like a bit of a 'solved problem' for the player - where my efforts cultivated fear of the unknown but at the cost of players patience. This being said, having multiple floors and some different interactions on each does keep things spicy here, so it's far from bland.
The layout of the level needs to work with the gameplay, which here means evasion of the alien and direction of the 'poor souls' to collect the various things necessary to clear the game. And I think it does, but there is more to say here about the 'solved problem' term I used earlier. Essentially, I felt my job was to evade, but I wasn't ever too worried about HOW to do that. With a very clear view of the map and of the alien/creatures location I felt capable of planning ahead & keeping safe (though I still lost 6 or so good men that day so it can't have been that easy!) The traps help with this of course, those were nasty when they suddenly caught my attention. But in terms of information available, I reckon I'd have been more worried I had less at certain times. Since we both looked to alien for inspiration, the best example I can think of are from those films. The motion sensors (such as in Alien Isolation also) will only pick up nasties within a certain range. Also, when the marines head into the hive for the first time in Aliens, their squad leader's video feed was patchy & unreliable. This ratchets up tension, since the alien could in fact be rather close and you may not know. There could be many ways to try this, such as if the yellow dot were to fade in/out or only appear when close or opening a door.
Hopefully all that made sense, overall I think you've done a great job! As you said, it's so interesting how different our games ended up even given the similar inspirations. Nice work! :D