hi max!
This was a wonderful exploration of engaging expressive choices. The prose was especially well-written in that it had a strong and consistent tone, and each element of the story continued to be relevant after its introduction. I would say that this is a story that is primarily about relationships, and delivers a meaningful commentary on queer relationships (and one's own relationship to queerness). However, many of the characters ended up seeming quite thin, with few traits that distinguish them from others. If you were to give this another pass, I'd recommend rewriting dialogue so that the character voices are more unique and less homogenous. This will make the ending with Henry much more impactful. That said, you accomplished a lot with this assignment and delivered a compelling retelling of a familiar story.
-jess