Hey Wesley!
Your voice is so strong, and it paints such a fascinating picture of this world (pun intended!) I love how sassy Dorian is- I felt very much like I /was/ him, and I thought all the different choices and reactions were enjoyable to explore. The different allusions to painting and through allegory and metaphor really served well to build up to the final moment of the game.
The story itself was paced well, but I felt that the way it was structurally conveyed through twine came across as a bit repetitive- I think varying the text, choice placement, and breaking up text blocks would accentuate the writing and add some visual excitement . The use of red text was a great example of this.
I honestly don’t know much about Dorian Gray, but playing this game really makes me want to check it out! Great job!
-Jude