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I feel awful... Choosing to let another man die gives me the "good end". I don't think that's right. I don't want those parents to suffer so much from one choice. If she were truly such a great daughter, then wouldn't it have been better for her to work towards repaying her parents for the hospital bill instead of letting them shoulder it all by themselves? Even if only a little each check, she should have been putting whatever funds she could have towards repaying her debt. Rather than deciding to get drunk on her own one night, she could have invested that money in a better place. It's impossible to escape being an adult, but that doesn't mean she had to choose such a destructive method of taking a break.

Sorry. Just venting a little. The story is well-written, but there are a couple of grammar issues you seemed to have. In particular, you had a tendency to say something "then" something when you should have used "than" instead. "Then" refers to time and a specific order of events, while "than" is the comparison between two things that you seemed to favor in your speaking. Additionally, though I recall only seeing it used once, "along" and "a long" have different meanings. I suspect that was more of an oversight with a space bar, however. I don't wish to go through every spelling error though, as that is not the point to my writing a review. I simply wished to bring to your attention that the script could benefit from another read-through, but otherwise seems to be in pretty good shape.

While I cannot personally relate to all of the protagonist's decisions and circumstances, I do think that you wrote a very meaningful story worth the read. Thank you for your time and the gem you have presented us with.

Thank you for your info, I am not a writer, I wrote this and I have horrific grammar, I keep making changes to spellings and so forth and I will re read through and try to fix the issues mentioned. The base of the entire story was written in one huge overnight binge. then I spent the rest of the time trying to fix all the errors.


But from reading your post, you seem to completely get that, choices are not always fair, that people make bad choices in general, and that one choice may not seem right but you never know how a choice could affect the outcome. I put a lot more unmentioned things in the story that no one has quite put together as of yet.

Thank you again for playing the game!