For just being an intro to the game so far it is fairly well written. I have a few issues however.
1) There are points while reading where a character is given the wrong gender.
2) The visuals are good but the lighting is so low that very few details can be made out dropping the over all quality of the work.
Thank you very much!
I can't afford to pay a professional translator, but you are helping me to shape it up a bit!
With the lights, yes, I'm trying not to abuse the "hard shadows" is my style but I think I'm overdoing it!
I've made new renders and modified others on that subject and I'm keeping in mind for the ones coming later.
I think the brightness of my monitor is high, that may be a reason why they are darker than I really want them to be.
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